Post by scribbliz on Dec 2, 2012 2:03:20 GMT -5
ok, first off, this is from my NaNo novel, which is technically a fantasy....BUT, I am wondering if this sounds as good to everyone else as it does to me....and it's their first kiss, so to me that would go under the romance section. Yes, I am over three quarters of the way through my book, and they finally have their FIRST kiss.....
any and all thoughts would be appreciated?
I turn to look at the man I know will always stay at my side. “Do you trust me, Dinan?” I ask, knowing what he will answer.
My fingers don’t even have time to itch before he answers. “Always, Raina,” Dinan answers without any hesitation. I stand to my feet, and draw Dinan with me. I feel flames burst to life behind my eyes. Flames trail behind my fingers as my hands move through the air. Fire encircles us, and my left hand traces a pattern to my side. My right hand comes to rest on Dinan’s chest, and the fire flares between us. The fire in me surges even higher, always burning hotter. The heat is so intense that I can feel the earth under my feet begin to burn. I take step closer to Dinan, aware of nothing but him. I can feel him watching me, curious about what is happening, but completely unafraid. I look up to him, knowing he can see the fire dancing in my eyes.
Dinan brushes the back of his hand down my cheek; then curls his fingers around the back of my neck. “You are so beautiful, love,” he whispers. I shift my weight even closer to him, and tilt my head to look up at him. I can feel my fire slowly moving through my hand into his chest. Moving slowly, Dinan leans down and brushes his lips against mine. My heart stops beating, and time stands still. It’s a brief, sweet kiss, yet even at that small contact I can feel the fire between us burn even stronger. Dinan looks down at me, and I can’t look away from his eyes. His other hand comes up slowly and rests against my cheek. I lean into his caress, and then, he is kissing me again.
The fire inside me explodes, and the flames around us burn higher. Dinan deepens our kiss, and I can feel the fire in me start to move into him even faster. It’s no longer a slow trickle; it’s a flood, pouring into him from every point our bodies touch. I can feel the flames move through every part of him, and I can feel it building an even stronger connection between us. I know that no matter how far apart we are, I will always be able to find him, always be able to know what he is feeling, to know that he is safe. My left hand slides over his shoulder and around his neck, and I never want this moment to end. I have never felt so connected to anyone.
The flames around between us slowly begin to fade, and I can feel my fire returning to me. Yet, even as we pull apart, I can feel a flame of my fire remain with Dinan. A part of me has stayed with him, and I know that this is exactly what I want. Dinan and I will always be connected now. He can feel the connection as strongly as I can, and I can feel his complete pleasure in our new bond.
any and all thoughts would be appreciated?
I turn to look at the man I know will always stay at my side. “Do you trust me, Dinan?” I ask, knowing what he will answer.
My fingers don’t even have time to itch before he answers. “Always, Raina,” Dinan answers without any hesitation. I stand to my feet, and draw Dinan with me. I feel flames burst to life behind my eyes. Flames trail behind my fingers as my hands move through the air. Fire encircles us, and my left hand traces a pattern to my side. My right hand comes to rest on Dinan’s chest, and the fire flares between us. The fire in me surges even higher, always burning hotter. The heat is so intense that I can feel the earth under my feet begin to burn. I take step closer to Dinan, aware of nothing but him. I can feel him watching me, curious about what is happening, but completely unafraid. I look up to him, knowing he can see the fire dancing in my eyes.
Dinan brushes the back of his hand down my cheek; then curls his fingers around the back of my neck. “You are so beautiful, love,” he whispers. I shift my weight even closer to him, and tilt my head to look up at him. I can feel my fire slowly moving through my hand into his chest. Moving slowly, Dinan leans down and brushes his lips against mine. My heart stops beating, and time stands still. It’s a brief, sweet kiss, yet even at that small contact I can feel the fire between us burn even stronger. Dinan looks down at me, and I can’t look away from his eyes. His other hand comes up slowly and rests against my cheek. I lean into his caress, and then, he is kissing me again.
The fire inside me explodes, and the flames around us burn higher. Dinan deepens our kiss, and I can feel the fire in me start to move into him even faster. It’s no longer a slow trickle; it’s a flood, pouring into him from every point our bodies touch. I can feel the flames move through every part of him, and I can feel it building an even stronger connection between us. I know that no matter how far apart we are, I will always be able to find him, always be able to know what he is feeling, to know that he is safe. My left hand slides over his shoulder and around his neck, and I never want this moment to end. I have never felt so connected to anyone.
The flames around between us slowly begin to fade, and I can feel my fire returning to me. Yet, even as we pull apart, I can feel a flame of my fire remain with Dinan. A part of me has stayed with him, and I know that this is exactly what I want. Dinan and I will always be connected now. He can feel the connection as strongly as I can, and I can feel his complete pleasure in our new bond.